写作/高考英语读后续写深度解读

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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.

His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.

The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”

The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn’t.

They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”

“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”

It didn’t take  long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box，she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.

续写要求：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.                                

                                                                              

                                                                              

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A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university.                           

                                                                              

                                                                              

【思路点拨】

1.文本细解读，确定续写结局

本文是一篇记叙文，文章主要讲述了家庭的主要成员之一——儿子要去上大学了，收拾好行李和父母、年迈的狗狗波比告别。虽然一个月后男孩就可以回家看望他们，但是年迈的狗狗波比是不懂这些的，她只知道自己的小主人不在家，所以她非常难过，寝食难安。男孩的父母为了安抚波比，买了一只小狗给她作伴。

续写部分是故事的结局，波比是否因为新伙伴的到来而恢复了活力，以及男孩回家时两只狗狗的反应。根据文章内容可知，波比是因为失去男孩的陪伴而感到孤独寂寞，因此续写结局可以设置为波比接纳了新伙伴，并且在男孩回家的时候，帮助新伙伴接受男孩。

2.段首句解读，确定续写方向

续写第一段首句写道“爸爸打开了盒子，一只可爱的小狗出现在面前”，第二段首句写道“几周后，男孩从大学回到了家里”，由此可知第一段内容应着重描写打开盒子之后的场面，可设想，盒子里的小狗面对陌生环境略有害怕，波比却因为有了同伴感到开心，然后和新伙伴一起愉快玩耍并且盼着男孩回家，这与第二段段首“几周后，男孩从大学回到了家里”形成巧妙衔接。续写第二段内容应着重描写男孩和波比、新伙伴见面的场景，可设想：男孩和波比彼此想念，欣喜无比；新伙伴看着波比对男孩那么亲近，也上前凑热闹。

3.划线词解读，规划续写细节

1)分类划线词

人物——parents，boy

环境——university

事物——Poppy，dog，box

动作——hugged，watched，back

情感——cheerful

2)构思具体情节

第一段情节：父亲打开盒子→新伙伴胆怯的露出脑袋→然后是爪子扒着盒子（box）→波比（Poppy）绕着盒子跑了两圈→爸爸把小狗（dog）抱出来→两只狗开始在房间里跑来跑去→父母（parents）和狗狗一起快乐的（cheerful）生活→并且等待男孩回家（back）；

第二段情节：男孩回来了，和父母拥抱在一起（hugged）→波比看到男孩，欣喜万分→新伙伴远远看着（watched）他们俩→一点点靠近→嗖地跑上前，也把脑袋凑到男孩身上→学着波比的样子，摇摇尾巴→男孩和两只小狗一起打闹。

【范文欣赏】

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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. It slowly showed its head, blinking its little eyes, then, two claws picked up the edge of the box and stood up. Unluckily, it fell in the box in a second. Poppy ran around the box twice, barking and barking. Dad took the dog to the ground gently. At first, the dog didn’t move. Poppy pushed his beloved toy to the dog. Soon, the two puppies ran after each other in the house happily. Day by day, the boy’s parents lived a cheerful life together with two puppies, while waiting for their boy to be back.

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A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. As soon as he entered the house, the boy and his parents hugged each other. Seeing the boy coming back, Poppy rushed forward to the boy’s feet with delight, shaking her head and wagging her tail. Her new partner watched them silently and moved to them a little bit. At last, he swished forward, learned how Poppy looked, and wagged his tail, too. Finally, the boy and two puppies were playing on the sofa excitedly.

亮点积累

1.词汇

blink v. 眨眼睛；beloved adj. 心爱的

2.短语

rush forward 向前冲；with delight 开心地

3.提分句式

(1)Day by day, the boy’s parents lived a cheerful life together with two puppies, while waiting for their boy to be back.

[分析] 本句是一个主从复合句。主句是“the boy’s parents lived a cheerful life”，“Day by day”是时间状语，“while waiting for their boy to be back”是省略了主语they和系动词were的状语从句。

[译文] 一天又一天，男孩的父母一边带着两只小狗快乐地生活着，一边等待儿子回家。

(2) Seeing the boy coming back, Poppy rushed forward to the boy’s feet with delight, shaking her head and wagging her tail.

[分析] 本句是一个简单句，主句是“Poppy rushed forward to the boy’s feet with delight”，“Seeing the boy coming back”和“shaking her head and wagging her tail”作伴随状语。

[译文] 看到男孩回来了，波比开心地冲到男孩脚边，摇头又摆尾。